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#92422 2 years, 4 months ago
Those are both really nice. The second one really struck a chord with me. Great work.
I can't come down, it's plain to see.
I can't come down, I've been set free.
Who you are, and what you do,
don't make no difference to me.
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Re: Post your art here

#92423 2 years, 4 months ago
Chester wrote:
Those are both really nice. The second one really struck a chord with me. Great work.


thank you chester! that 2nd one has been written a few different ways including one version that was almost 2 pages, but i settled on the short one as my final version, i appreciate your words and the poem that would up being posted in the other thread was really nice i really dug it
People joining hand in hand while the music plays the band
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Re: Post your art here

#92424 2 years, 4 months ago
Thank you very much for that compliment. I find when I'm writing, I do the same thing. Start with an idea, then try
to flesh it out. Eventually getting it down to the core thought. It can be a fun process, or sometimes it can get a
bit frustrating. Most pieces I've done, take several rewrites before it seems right. This place has done wonders for
my creative flow. The art thread has been designated as a "Sacred Space", and we try and support each others
efforts in a positive way. So you can always feel comfortable posting your work here.
I can't come down, it's plain to see.
I can't come down, I've been set free.
Who you are, and what you do,
don't make no difference to me.
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#92479 2 years, 4 months ago
doin_that_rag wrote:
Here's two poems i wrote for my creative writing class, while i'd call myself a writer i would not call myself a poet

In my humble opinion, DTR, you can call yourself a poet as well as a writer. I thought they were both excellent, and I hope you share more!
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Re: Post your art here

#92564 2 years, 4 months ago
well here's one more i've been working on and its in its infancy as a poem this is the 1st part a 3 part poem, but i also think this part can stand alone its my rough version yet i don't think i'll make any major changes for this one i'm posting it cause i haven't submitted it to my workshop so i'd love some feedback both positive or negative (constructive criticism is always welcomed with me)
Dysfunctional Family

Why?
A question asked,
Rarely answered.

The neon lights reflect on the ground,
Awning,
Covers the man from the rain-
A line of straggling drops falls every 2.5 seconds
Missing the cup filled with worthless copper Lincolns and
Silver Roosevelts.


“Spare any change?”
“Can you spare any change?” Marcus asks,

People slowly pass,
All but a few find it impossible to
Give up a meaningless portion of their
Earnings to,
Help Marcus.

Why?

The local drunk
Sits,
Spouting crazy schizophrenic thoughts
Between hours of silence,

“Spare any change?”
“Can you spare any change?”

Sun fades,
Hiding behind high rises until
Its next day at work,

Moon rises,
Light shines neon,
Puddles of broken dreams flood
The streets of
W 103 and Columbus on
A cold,
November night.

“Spare any change?”
“Can you spare any change?”

Everyone is in a hurry to
Get where they are going,
Friends wait,
Phones ring,
Taxis stop.

No one is in a hurry to help Marcus,
Why?
He wonders.
Why is he starving?
Why is he craving?

“Spare any change?”
“Can you spare any change?”

Cravings come and go,
Like the people,
Sometimes the subdue at night,
Most times they are like the City,
They never sleep.

Sleep,
Small escape from the
Terrors of addiction to
Homelessness,
Cold streets,
A mattress for Marcus,
Puddles- pillows, damp blanket.

“Spare any change?”
“Can you spare any change?”

Lights,
Neon- illuminate the street,
HOMELESS, liquor,
Locks eyes with Marcus,
Mad,
Another nonsense ramble
Sends a group running,
Yelling, Marcus
Drives another client away.

Why?
People joining hand in hand while the music plays the band
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Re: Post your art here

#92611 2 years, 4 months ago
Couldn't find tattoo thread but this is artwork
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GOOD LOVE
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Re: Post your art here

#95072 2 years, 4 months ago
Christ Mass Card Design

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Re: Post your art here

#95471 2 years, 4 months ago
I like it. Very colorful Paige.
I can't come down, it's plain to see.
I can't come down, I've been set free.
Who you are, and what you do,
don't make no difference to me.
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New Year's Eve

#95537 2 years, 4 months ago

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Gonna wait until the midnight hour!
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#95896 2 years, 4 months ago
Chester wrote:
I like it. Very colorful Paige.


Thanks,
Just a little something for the kids to print out and color in or to craft with:) at Holy day time.
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